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BEFORE
Therapeutic cloning
allows only human cells to be cloned. No fully formed
new creature
is created as a result
of this cloning. Therapeutic cloning has the potential be used in future
medical research and organ transplants. Someday, scientists might have the
ability to clone entire organs; they will no longer need to wait
for organ donors in order to perform organ transplants. There is also the potential to cure
many diseases with therapeutic cloning.
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AFTER
Therapeutic cloning
creates a human embryo not intended to develop more fully. Instead,
cells from the clone are removed from the embryo and used in research. After
removal of the cells, the embryo dies. Therapeutic cloning holds the promise
of being able to create cells that could be used in future medical research
and organ transplantation. Someday, scientists might have the ability to
clone entire organs. Patients would then no longer need to wait for organ
donors to receive an organ transplant. The procedure also offers the
potential to cure many diseases.
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